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Samuel Koul Biar
3/30/2023 05:11:30 am
https://www.google.com/imgres?imgurl=https%3A%2F%2F1.bp.blogspot.com%2F-AK_OYDWF4JA%2FXwERG2RqPQI%2FAAAAAAAAYzg%2FguidPJlWguc4nTDXelhffeZ9OiaEEGYgACLcBGAsYHQ%2Fs1600%2FEvgeny%252BStepanovich%252BKobytev%252BThe%252Bhuman%252Bface%252Bafter%252Bfour%252Byears%252Bof%252Bwar%252B%2525281%252529.jpg&tbnid=2v1Y2US_R3WA7M&vet=12ahUKEwjIx8mDy4P-AhXIk4QIHXXpAwgQMygAegQIARA2..i&imgrefurl=https%3A%2F%2Frarehistoricalphotos.com%2Fevgeny-stepanovich-kobytev-1941-1945%2F&docid=02FhjjUKBIKCZM&w=1600&h=1055&q=picture%20of%20guy%20before%20and%20after%20war&safe=active&ved=2ahUKEwjIx8mDy4P-AhXIk4QIHXXpAwgQMygAegQIARA2
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Reece Donahue
4/2/2023 06:08:15 pm
I really like your thesis because it uses a big idea like war and you say the effects hurt the winner too
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Arnav Srivastava
4/3/2023 04:33:25 am
The thesis is very cloudy as you used far too many commas. Although it gets the point across, the thesis can be split into two sentences to make it clearer and more grammatically sound.
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Addison Carnow
4/3/2023 04:34:45 am
I love your use of before and after photos, and how you can easily use them to convey how an event has changed the world. I like the details you drawed from the image and the assumptions you made from them.
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Rithik Ramkumar
4/3/2023 04:39:26 am
I like your topic, being that war can be grueling, and overall tragic for both sides no matter the war. However, I think that what you could do is provide more real life examples of how war has actually affected soldiers for the worst. For instance, soldiers coming home after WW1, who all drastically changed due to the atrocities faced at war.
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Ethan Noel
4/3/2023 04:42:51 am
I like how you went from a broader context of the effects on war to a personal impact in how you would set up the essay.
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Eva Qasim
4/4/2023 04:37:39 am
I like how you choose a photo that compared and contrast a soldier from a war. Your thesis is also a great point that would make a great essay!!
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nicole vastis
4/4/2023 04:45:07 am
I like your line of reason of focusing on the effects on the country as a whole, then moving on to the effects on individuals. i also like the outside evidence of Come and See to support your argument.
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Eva Qasim
4/5/2023 04:39:36 am
Image One: https://www.google.com/search?q=teenagers+from+the+80s&rlz=1CAEZTK_enUS914US919&source=lnms&tbm=isch&sa=X&ved=2ahUKEwiM3-Hlz5L-AhXLnWoFHefhDxoQ0pQJegQIBxAC&biw=1366&bih=617&dpr=1&safe=active&ssui=on#imgrc=t_L37ymsYBQIpM
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Morgan Furr
4/17/2023 04:39:08 am
I like that your pictures have a very clear contrast and I like how your thesis contains a broad idea like war.
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3/30/2023 05:26:02 am
URLs are blocked by ZScaler. Please click on the link to the document at the bottom to see the images.
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3/30/2023 05:30:16 am
Found another way to get working links:
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3/30/2023 05:33:05 am
P.S. The copy & pasting messed with the format so it's all one huge clump of text. See original doc for something that makes more sense*
Grayson Kerr
3/30/2023 05:32:09 am
https://static.inspiremore.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/05/17110236/beforeandafter.jpg
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Dhruv Dudhat
4/3/2023 04:35:12 am
Could you detail your paragraphs more, meaning, where would each topic go for each paragraph and what would be your layout for the paragraph? For example, would you talk about how society has changed throughout the time periods in your first paragraph and then the other topic in the 2nd?
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Emma Heard
4/3/2023 04:36:05 am
I like how you have your essay set up and how your key point matches the thesis.
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Vanessa Muniz
4/4/2023 04:42:52 am
I like how your essay set up is but if feel like you should add something else to it as well. and Thesis needs to be more clear im a little confused by it.
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Taylor Martin
3/30/2023 07:25:17 am
a) https://w7.pngwing.com/pngs/483/111/png-transparent-red-logo-ganesha-swastika-symbol-hinduism-om-om-text-diwali-logo-thumbnail.png
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Noah M
4/4/2023 03:57:27 am
I really appreciate how you elaborate on the roots of both swastikas and point out how one is a symbol of hate but the other is simply a religious symbol. It goes to show how we need to not rope both together because both have entirely different meanings than the other.
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Dyuman Das
3/30/2023 08:49:36 am
World Cup: https://ca-times.brightspotcdn.com/dims4/default/ba003a9/2147483647/strip/false/crop/4276x2405+0+223/resize/1200x675!/quality/80/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fcalifornia-times-brightspot.s3.amazonaws.com%2Fdb%2Fb7%2F3c22d14541a792b6953104dddad9%2Fap22353567668231.jpg
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a) (purpose of the essay)- The purpose of my essay would be to illustrate that the whole of something is greater than the sum of its parts.
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Arnav Srivastava
4/2/2023 10:06:29 am
(Photos here: https://www.ndtv.com/indians-abroad/distinguish-between-swastika-and-hakenkreuz-says-canadian-mp-2800585 )
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Samuel Koul Biar
4/3/2023 04:33:52 am
I like how you are advocating for the difference between the duality of both hindu and nazi sybmols which is really needed in the political and economic state of the world right now.
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Taylor Martin
4/3/2023 04:35:59 am
I did the same topic, and I love the way you worded your purpose. I like that you focused on the design differences and meaning behind each symbol.
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Ethan Noel
4/2/2023 11:07:05 am
URLs:
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Jeremy Liu
4/2/2023 01:59:25 pm
I like your choice of pictures and it is shocking how much climate change has destroyed our world. One question though, does your second paragraph have something to do with climate change because it seems that it is kind of off topic from climate change.
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4/3/2023 04:36:31 am
While I like your image (it's very pretty) and how you set up your key points as a bulleted list, I didn't like your thesis and organization.
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Dyuman Das
4/3/2023 04:39:05 am
The choice of pictures is a good example of how surprising climate change has effected Earth. But the 2nd paragraph isn't about climate change or humans changing landscapes, is off topic.
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Addison Carnow
4/2/2023 12:51:06 pm
https://img.buzzfeed.com/buzzfeed-static/static/2021-06/22/1/tmp/e1ad26af1e0b/tmp-name-2-8495-1624326053-16_dblbig.jpg
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Gregory Park
4/3/2023 04:34:23 am
I enjoy reading your ideas as COVID has affected multiple health care workers. I think if you went into more statistics and more evidence your "essay" would be very detailed and good.
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Gregory
4/3/2023 04:42:40 am
Wrong one
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Dhruv Dudhat
4/3/2023 04:42:58 am
Great line of reasoning and contrasting of the images to bring forward a message that healthcare workers have undergone hard times to bring better conditions for the public.
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Emerson Humphrey
4/4/2023 04:54:51 am
I think your images are a good depiction of what your essay is trying to depict. I like the way you would have set up your essay and how you decided to conclude to bring your points to an end.
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Jeremy Liu
4/2/2023 01:43:37 pm
A.): https://www.technologyreview.com/2019/06/07/883/youtube-is-deleting-videos-on-nazi-history-as-part-of-its-hate-speech-crackdown/
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Gregory
4/3/2023 04:43:02 am
I enjoy reading your ideas as COVID has affected multiple health care workers. I think if you went into more statistics and more evidence your "essay" would be very detailed and good.
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Reyna Lee
4/4/2023 04:39:19 am
I really like this connection you made between Adolf Hitler and the statue Christ the Redeemer. It was a creative idea to connect them and you could make a strong essay out of it.
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Emma Collard
4/2/2023 05:19:11 pm
https://i.guim.co.uk/img/media/e73a1de7e82d889fb1923d790454d549b39a756d/0_44_2480_1489/master/2480.jpg?width=2480&quality=85&s=cfc94cc8a882c340b9e10b1c0224f846
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Elshaday Ftsum Tekeste
4/3/2023 06:36:09 pm
The contrast between your two images was so clear that it was hard to miss. And although I'd actually known about how COVID lock-down had inadvertently reduced pollution levels, the image was perhaps the clearest evidence of such. I also liked one of your key points mentioning how COVID, although an overwhelmingly negative experience for most of us, it also had some undeniable positive consequences as well.
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Elshaday Ftsum Tekeste
4/4/2023 04:38:01 am
I also noticed how you included the "Doing so" part of the thesis that explains the image's effect on the audience. It makes the thesis more adequate, defensible and it also explains some of the image's nuances.
Kailin Marciniak
4/4/2023 04:53:49 am
The two images you chose clearly exemplify the environmental effects involving pollution throughout the pandemic. I think structuring the essay chronologically is the most effective and the key points you mentioned are fully supporting your thesis throughout.
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Nivedha Prathap Chandran
4/2/2023 05:52:22 pm
https://www.google.com/imgres?imgurl=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.militarytimes.com%2Fresizer%2FQWMtmCUuX2P_mgud0emb-8FnFnw%3D%2F1024x0%2Ffilters%3Aformat(png)%3Aquality(70)%2Fcloudfront-us-east-1.images.arcpublishing.com%2Farchetype%2F7FXTWOPIFJCBXCKM364BCM6HSM.png&tbnid=NV52KC6rlfz5IM&vet=12ahUKEwiupaTfuIz-AhXzbDABHT3JCnMQMygFegQIARA5..i&imgrefurl=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.militarytimes.com%2Foff-duty%2Fmilitary-culture%2F2022%2F05%2F11%2Fpropaganda-out-of-ukraine-conflict-is-not-much-different-from-world-war-i%2F&docid=TjMcU1UXZGRiEM&w=1024&h=576&q=two%20images%20that%20are%20similar%20but%20different%20war&ved=2ahUKEwiupaTfuIz-AhXzbDABHT3JCnMQMygFegQIARA5
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Jason Nguyen
4/2/2023 07:22:46 pm
You have a really strong and defensible thesis! I also like how in your organization you started off with a little context on Uncle Sam's impact and then moved onto your comparing/contrasting.
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Laksha
4/3/2023 04:38:24 am
The juxtaposition that you created in your rhetorical analysis with the Uncle Sam vs Ukraine/Putin example is really strong. Additionally, the organization/broad outline of your essay is really concise and sophisticated.
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Emma Collard
4/3/2023 04:39:04 am
I love your thesis, those pictures are really interesting! One thing I would suggest is including what the difference in those pictures means about the world then and the world now.
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Hanna
4/3/2023 04:44:17 am
Your thesis is defensible and displays complexity. Your organization clearly states the order you're going to elaborate the connections and the differences between the images you chose.
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Corrie McArthur
4/3/2023 12:35:52 pm
I like your theisis and I think you have very strong key points
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Sajni Patel
4/4/2023 04:36:35 am
I really like your strong and defensible thesis, it sounds very sophisticated. I like how you concisely outline the essay with your key points and organization as well while comparing Uncle Sam with Putin/Ukraine.
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Reece Donahue
4/2/2023 06:06:24 pm
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Gregory Park
4/2/2023 06:42:57 pm
Picture 1:
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Bella Norton
4/3/2023 04:42:51 am
I like all the key points you had but I think you could also add how people who grow up rich are usually less happy than the people who grew up into poverty or a lower class
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Corrie
4/3/2023 12:35:14 pm
I like the idea of this and i think it was explained well
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Sajni Patel
4/2/2023 07:09:30 pm
URLS:
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Jason Nguyen
4/2/2023 07:20:15 pm
Martin Luther King Jr. : https://dsk4t6ov5vq8n.cloudfront.net/uploads/rlfD0yh-asset-mezzanine-16x9-BZiapdn.jpg
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Jason Nguyen
4/2/2023 07:21:17 pm
The questions were numbered on my document but I don't know why it's not on here...sorry if it's hard to read.
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Nivedha Prathap Chandran
4/3/2023 04:37:06 am
Hey Jason! I honestly really think your thesis is defensible and I loved how you distinguished the superficial similarities between Martin Luther King Jr. and Malcom X... however, the differences between their approaches to civil freedom is drastic. In your organization, I would add in a small paragraph... the similarities between Malcom X and MLK Jr. for the "compare" part of the compare and contrast.
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ziry
4/4/2023 05:10:49 am
I like how you went into depth how you would explain this and your purpose
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Jason
4/4/2023 08:43:23 am
Thanks girl
Rithik Ramkumar
4/2/2023 07:42:18 pm
a. https://www.google.com/imgres?imgurl=https%3A%2F%2Fmedia.istockphoto.com%2Fid%2F699729488%2Fvector%2Fnuclear-explosion-atomic-bomb-in-the-city-symbol-of-nuclear-war-end-of-world-dangers-of.jpg%3Fs%3D612x612%26w%3D0%26k%3D20%26c%3DtBNGCfVb5A1nTvP6nx7aFH3wz9R5v5jj5sGtArInebU%3D&tbnid=z4NqyRvM8_5MeM&vet=12ahUKEwiYrJ3dyoz-AhUdkokEHTioDtcQMygCegUIARDWAQ..i&imgrefurl=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.istockphoto.com%2Fvector%2Fnuclear-explosion-atomic-bomb-in-the-city-symbol-of-nuclear-war-end-of-world-dangers-gm699729488-129566503&docid=XILkMG-14dM31M&w=612&h=459&q=atomic%20bomb%20art&client=safari&ved=2ahUKEwiYrJ3dyoz-AhUdkokEHTioDtcQMygCegUIARDWAQ
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andreea
4/3/2023 04:37:33 am
anything stupid
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andreea
4/3/2023 04:38:16 am
But anyways, yes
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Dhruv Dudhat
4/2/2023 11:25:19 pm
https://www.military-history.org/behind-the-image/behind-the-image-wartime-christmas.htm
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Dhruv Dudhat
4/3/2023 04:51:23 am
revised thesis, messed a few things up:
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Amy Zeledon
4/3/2023 03:04:33 am
https://www.google.com/url?sa=i&url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.worldatlas.com%2Farticles%2Fwhat-is-gran-colombia.html&psig=AOvVaw1202jTmLNWVJYxbbwJU_-a&ust=1680602574768000&source=images&cd=vfe&ved=0CAsQjRxqFwoTCJCusM26jf4CFQAAAAAdAAAAABAR
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Bella Norton
4/3/2023 04:25:22 am
1. https://www.google.com/url?sa=i&url=https%3A%2F%2Fcommonwealthmagazine.org%2Fpolitics%2Fadvantage-democrats%2F&psig=AOvVaw2-BkEuEBkrKWvi_5Hy8qed&ust=1680265490699000&source=images&cd=vfe&ved=0CAwQjRxqFwoTCNDKpvTSg_4CFQAAAAAdAAAAABAD
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Kennedy Draper
4/3/2023 05:19:38 am
Image: https://encrypted-tbn0.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcRIX4KpPPNdBMLbhBIqFIthreyy0y9CXHtW5fv-cy_mFw&usqp=CAU&ec=48665698
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Lilah Childers
4/3/2023 10:55:56 am
I did a similar president before and after office with lincoln! It might be helpful to detail a little more about what specific changes in his face reflect his job. Overall I really like your ideas!
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Jackson Konzelmann
4/3/2023 01:06:09 pm
I almost did those pictures too becasue I thought it was crazy how much stress changes their faces.
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Ella Case
4/3/2023 07:53:55 am
https://i.ytimg.com/vi/srADkgkDdcc/maxresdefault.jpg
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Koome
4/4/2023 04:41:40 am
Your organization of your body paragraphs was very concise and informative. You also have a strong thesis!! I like your two pics hehe
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Lilah Childers
4/3/2023 10:52:54 am
pre war lincoln post war lincoln
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Jackson Konzelmann
4/3/2023 01:04:48 pm
I like your outline alot, I would have loved to see the pictures though.
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Lilah Childers
4/4/2023 04:36:31 am
that's my bad, i didn't realize my links didn't copy
andreea
4/3/2023 11:57:31 am
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-nA36rj4vuwp6yq4FM8KBf0yM0RbWQIW4fEEe-crmec/edit?usp=sharing
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Corrie McArthur
4/3/2023 12:34:07 pm
A)
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Jackson Konzelmann
4/3/2023 01:03:21 pm
I really liked your thesis and it is somthing that I didnt really think about.
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Lauren R.
4/3/2023 05:19:32 pm
You made good key points which you reflected back onto your thesis too, which made the rest make sense!
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Lauren R.
4/4/2023 04:36:31 am
though I think you could expand on your organization and the way it connects to the audience from your thesis too.
Ella Case
4/4/2023 04:50:13 am
You have a really strong thesis I think you stated interesting key points, but I think you could have made your organization a little longer just to really help visualize where everything would go
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Jackson Konzelmann
4/3/2023 01:01:54 pm
https://s7d2.scene7.com/is/image/TWCNews/ap-jail_populationjpg2jpg?wid=1250&hei=703&$wide-bg$
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Silas Leonard
4/4/2023 04:40:56 am
What are your solutions?
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Mallory Karrenstein
4/4/2023 04:46:27 am
I really like your photos and your comparison of school to prison. I think you could have made your main topic a little stronger by focusing more on the free will being taken away and a little less on how the government is trying to "make people easier to control". But other than that I think you have a pretty strong foundation and I think you can make this a very good essay.
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Will McKean
4/4/2023 04:50:16 am
When looking at your picture evidence I think that the guards/teachers not looking at students is purely circumstantial, guards have to make sure no rules are being broken and teachers have to monitor the kids. The evidence needs to be stronger to support the thesis.
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Lauren Ramos
4/3/2023 05:17:07 pm
Two images:
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Elshaday Tekeste
4/3/2023 05:35:34 pm
Fall of Saigon: https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/9/95/Saigon-hubert-van-es.jpg
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Jack Vuong
4/4/2023 04:38:33 am
While I find your commentary to be adequate, I fail to recognize where the comparison between the two images is. All you discuss are historical aspects about the Fall of Saigon and the Kabul evacuation --however, what specific idiosyncrasies about the images are different or are similar,that demonstrate the message or purpose you want to convey?
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Jack Vuong
4/4/2023 04:39:34 am
*idiosyncrasies
Elshaday Ftsum Tekeste
4/4/2023 04:44:50 am
While I find your comment to be justified, in the sense that I didn't specify that the images both illustrate an American aircraft evacuating authorized personnel, I also find it to be a little short sighted. The image was supposed to convey the historical connection between the two images, it's purpose was to demonstrate the failure of the politicians at the helm of the government to recognize the fact that they're repeating the same mistake LBJ and his advisors made almost half a century earlier.
Statue of Liberty:
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Will McKean
4/3/2023 07:09:11 pm
The comparison was not one that I would have ever thought about, and your comment on how both are used to unite a country is very interesting to think about. Nice Job.
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Corrie McArthur
4/4/2023 04:39:38 am
I like your comparison I didn't ever really think about this and I think your thesis is very defensable
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Vanessa Muniz
4/3/2023 06:38:10 pm
First picture:
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Silas Leonard
4/4/2023 04:37:52 am
https://static.wikia.nocookie.net/indianajones/images/0/07/9906753.jpg/revision/latest/scale-to-width/360?cb=20080121225827
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Silas Leonard
4/3/2023 06:47:12 pm
https://i0.wp.com/www.tor.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/08/Ark-of-Covenant.jpg?
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Silas Leonard
4/4/2023 04:39:09 am
https://static.wikia.nocookie.net/indianajones/images/0/07/9906753.jpg/revision/latest/scale-to-width/360?cb=20080121225827
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Will McKean
4/3/2023 07:05:17 pm
https://www.google.com/url?sa=i&url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.waymarking.com%2Fwaymarks%2FWMZYJ4_The_Wall_Jumper_Berlin_Germany&psig=AOvVaw2OPxgfdsGFEWVsFHV2nA7-&ust=1680658922361000&source=images&cd=vfe&ved=0CAsQjRxqFwoTCLD3tMKMj_4CFQAAAAAdAAAAABAE
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Jack Vuong
4/3/2023 08:05:13 pm
Links:
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Elshaday Tekeste
4/4/2023 05:30:24 am
While I do generally agree with you on the contrasting images assign a "positive and negative connotations to each respective practice of free-range and factory farming, effectively illustrating the brutality of the latter", I don't see how said brutality is ignored by a large portion of the American public. As the existence of PETA and many other animal rights activists in modern-day America have made it so that every commercial from the food and cosmetics industry mention the fact that they're cruelty free. In fact, a large portion of our generation, gen x, would probably not even buy brands that don't mentions they're cruelty-free.
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Jack Vuong
4/4/2023 05:34:49 am
Most Americans still willfully ignore the cruelties of factory farming. People still buy mass-produced meats from walmart, supermarkets, etc., including me. The existence of activists groups doesn't detract from this point. In general, people still ignore the implications of factory farming. And the only way for these things to change is for the public to become more knowledgable about these issues so regulative legislation can be passed.
Elshaday Ftsum Tekeste
4/4/2023 05:47:01 am
If the American public ignores your argument too, then legislators won't be persuaded to pass legislation that you're arguing for. Although that's not to say spreading awareness is a bad thing, it needs to be consistent and/or revolutionary to actually do anything. Additionally, you just discredited yourself as ignoring the same messages that you're arguing for, so what is your purpose if you yourself would ignore it too.
Elshaday Ftsum Tekeste
4/4/2023 05:35:13 am
Furthermore, if people already know about it, and ignore it on purpose, why would they read yours in the first place, they would ignore it too.
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Hanna Laabid
4/3/2023 08:29:51 pm
https://qph.cf2.quoracdn.net/main-qimg-4e6722644b4ec9b42ee311ea76a4945b-lq
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Noah M
4/4/2023 04:06:52 am
I disagree entirely. The soviet union did not exploit the working class, instead the opposite was true as compared to 1913 levels, the Soviet Union had a 908.8% increase in industrial growth. The soviet union also had a huge increase in national income, from 48.5 rubles to 105, railways saw a 217.7% increase compared to 1913. The soviet union saw a raised life expectancy by 65%, eliminated homelessness, and raised school enrollment by 460%.
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Noah
4/4/2023 04:13:38 am
*Sorry if this seemed harsh, im just bluntly reiterating statistics. Have a great day!
Kailin Marciniak
4/4/2023 04:15:45 am
https://www.silveroaksbehavioralhospital.com/wp-content/uploads/2020/10/healthy-mind.png
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NOah M
4/4/2023 04:31:39 am
I really liked how you pointed out with many statistics how the pandemic negatively impacted people and also how you juxtaposed pre covid with post covid.
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Noah Michaud
4/4/2023 04:28:34 am
https://assets.bwbx.io/images/users/iqjWHBFdfxIU/iXSmhuJbr8.I/v0/800x-1.jpg
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Kali Daniels
4/4/2023 04:39:45 am
1)https://www.travelwisconsin.com/uploads/blog/e2/e2ccbd6f-1070-4272-889b-cc7720bd664d-farm-scene-with-cows.jpg?preset=article-details-header
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Emerson Humphrey
4/4/2023 04:52:15 am
https://www.hitc.com/en-gb/2021/09/14/met-gala-the-hunger-games/
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finna young
4/4/2023 05:01:57 am
1: https://www.google.com/imgres?imgurl=https%3A%2F%2Fimages.unsplash.com%2Fphoto-1546026423-cc4642628d2b%3Fixlib%3Drb-4.0.3%26ixid%3DMnwxMjA3fDB8MHxzZWFyY2h8Mnx8Y29yYWx8ZW58MHx8MHx8%26w%3D1000%26q%3D80&tbnid=u0O0Al21ijjZzM&vet=12ahUKEwjVrsjwkZD-AhVYYTABHRMuA_sQMygCegUIARDlAQ..i&imgrefurl=https%3A%2F%2Funsplash.com%2Fphotos%2F0G01UI1MQhg&docid=DlhZwiLu4l2WKM&w=1000&h=750&q=live%20coral&safe=active&ved=2ahUKEwjVrsjwkZD-AhVYYTABHRMuA_sQMygCegUIARDlAQ
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Ava Williams
4/4/2023 05:24:30 am
You did a good job of putting your organization in the same order of your thesis but I am pretty sure in your organization you might also need a conclusion.
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Ava Williams
4/4/2023 05:04:33 am
Pictures-
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Ava Williams
4/4/2023 05:25:38 am
Organization- Introduce braces as whole and how a lot of people can relate to having braces, explain how the look of braces has changed significantly, go over how though the purpose of braces hasn’t really changed they have been improved to be made more comfortable and more appealing to look at, then conclude that braces have advanced over the years.
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Ahtziry Perez
4/4/2023 05:07:02 am
My purpose would be to emphasize the huge change there is over time and how war is later on in a way forgotten and moved on to new things.
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Ahtziri Prestegui Loeza
4/4/2023 07:58:45 am
Link:https://www.google.com/imgres?imgurl=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.verywellhealth.com%2Fthmb%2FVyYzo4sEqxcS5NU4uRvOg4cmsMk%3D%2F1500x0%2Ffilters%3Ano_upscale()%3Amax_bytes(150000)%3Astrip_icc()%2Fbpd-vs-bipolar-5096132_FinaL-e946be6d6df04527a2a043e6e974abd0.jpg&tbnid=mpdC8FCq5x5u0M&vet=12ahUKEwijj-Oy-YP-AhXvYTABHfDEBZAQMygCegUIARDpAQ..i&imgrefurl=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.verywellhealth.com%2Fbpd-vs-bipolar-5096132&docid=Idl3NmL11mjjcM&w=1500&h=1000&q=borderline%20personality%20disorder&ved=2ahUKEwijj-Oy-YP-AhXvYTABHfDEBZAQMygCegUIARDpAQ&safe=active&ssui=on
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Daniela Betancourt Santibanez
4/4/2023 06:10:24 pm
https://www.google.com/search?q=before+covid+and+after+covid&rlz=1CAEZTK_enUS1007&source=lnms&tbm=isch&sa=X&ved=2ahUKEwjT6IHXu5H-AhU-FFkFHcb_AasQ0pQJegQIBxAC&biw=1366&bih=617&dpr=1&safe=active&ssui=on#imgrc=7DfmOb_BuiIO7M
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Daniela Betancourt
4/4/2023 06:11:49 pm
I feel like my thesis is lacking on something, need to work on rhetorical thesis
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Swan Truong
4/4/2023 06:35:01 pm
https://www.istockphoto.com/photo/group-of-happy-african-children-east-africa-gm640305394-115918255
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Morgan Furr
4/5/2023 06:01:42 am
https://www.google.com/imgres?imgurl=https%3A%2F%2Fimages.everydayhealth.com%2Fimages%2Ftherapist-speaks-on-feeling-stressed-anxious-ukraine-1440x810.jpg%3Fsfvrsn%3D2728486d_1&tbnid=745eUVaDg6ll9M&vet=12ahUKEwjfpY6E45L-AhWMdDABHZDSDgkQMygAegQIARB6..i&imgrefurl=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.everydayhealth.com%2Fcolumns%2Fhealth-answers%2Fa-therapist-speaks-on-coping-with-feeling-anxious-sad-helpless-or-hopeless-about-ukraine%2F&docid=ktbiurVre-2_6M&w=1440&h=810&q=people%20being%20sad%20about%20war&ved=2ahUKEwjfpY6E45L-AhWMdDABHZDSDgkQMygAegQIARB6&safe=active&ssui=on
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Nelly
4/15/2023 08:06:58 am
Image 1 : https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cB-JYcKVF81iizV9-NmROJkEXdCvXQpqGuv33jpQepg/edit?usp=sharing
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Reyna Lee
4/16/2023 06:47:39 pm
a.) https://patimes.org/celebrating-the-fight-for-womens-suffrage-an-interview-with-nancy-tate/
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Ethan Blackmon
4/17/2023 05:24:23 am
Jan 6th Protest Image - https://media-cldnry.s-nbcnews.com/image/upload/newscms/2021_15/3464587/210414-capitol-riot-mb-1540.JPG
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alma benitez
4/17/2023 09:02:59 am
https://th.bing.com/th/id/OIP.CmJM38adfrfrxGH-1HiyBgHaIf D4?w=343&h=180&c=7&r=0&o=5&dpr=1.3&pid=1.7
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Mallory Karrenstein
4/18/2023 06:51:09 pm
Picture Links:
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Bella
4/20/2023 04:53:53 am
https://www.demilked.com/contrast-between-worlds-ugurgallen/
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Nicole Vastis
4/25/2023 04:09:57 pm
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Emma Heard
5/1/2023 06:48:49 pm
https://i.insider.com/50bd29f76bb3f72307000026?width=618
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Megan Love
5/4/2023 04:41:09 am
I feel like you could've elaborated more on your key points. Your thesis was really strong though, and the way your organizing your essay seems like it would flow nicely.
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Megan Love
5/4/2023 04:37:37 am
https://pittnews.com/article/3509/news/neighborhoods-in-transition-gentrification-hits-pittsburgh/#modal-photo
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